Change second sentences, needs to be rewritten.
Revised Sentence: Education is a big part of my life. I wish to further my education, but difficulties at home make it hard to reach that point.
First sentence in second paragraph is redundant.
Redundancy in the first sentence in the third paragraph.
Revise first sentence in fourth paragraph: I am expecting to have a baby soon, and this is keeping me from furthering my education.
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